He was afraid for his life in his own house. He snatched
medicines from the cupboards and stuffed homemade quilts into a large sackcloth
bag, which was already laden with biscuits and dried fruits and meat and
anything else that might sustain his family once they escaped.
If they got out in time.
With trembling hands, he grabbed pairs of socks from the cabinet
and crammed them in with the rest of the gear in his makeshift survival kit,
avoiding the gaze of the woman at the door. His wife.
He would have to tell her the horror he had brought upon
them. Why they were no longer safe in their home, where she’d given their son
life seventeen years ago. They had to get out. And for now, there was no time
to explain. Whatever was coming sent shivers through his spine.
And few things frightened Hermes Aurelius.
...to be continued.
Brittney, you are so gifted...could you please write faster? I need to know what happened and will happen...
ReplyDeleteEvery time you write, I am automatically drawn into the story. Even if I don't know the characters, you always seem to capture me in those first 300 words.
ReplyDeleteExcellent, darling -- perfect amount of detail and action to get me hooked on the story ... looking forward to learning more about Hermes and seeing what happens && why he is in such a frenzy!
ReplyDeleteThis is riveting. I'm loving the name Hermes Aurelius, he sounds like such a boss.
ReplyDeleteYou are such a great writer! I can't wait to read your books! Like I've said before, you really are a gift from God! :)
ReplyDeleteThe suspense in this book's beginning is fantastic! I really want to read more!
ReplyDeleteAs usual, I am captivated by your gift for the written word...and I can hardly wait to see what else you have in store for us! God has given you such a blessing, and He has blessed me to be in your audience of admirers. Brittney, I always knew you are something special! :-)
ReplyDeleteBrit that is so so good! I know a professional author now :D I am so proud.
ReplyDeleteThe intensity of your hook is fantastic! Just enough tease to get anyone's attention! The fans will surely cry MORE MORE!
ReplyDeleteWell, I'm hooked. Britney, I have two things to say to you. One, stay awesome and keep writing stuff like this! Two, stay awesome and keep writing stuff like this and then get it out there so I can read it!!!
ReplyDeleteUgh, I forgot to put my name in there. It's me...obviously. I mean it's so obvious it's painful. I'm literally getting stomach cramps from this- or~ maybe that was just that burrito...
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If this is a reflection of the overall quality of your stories (which I very much assume it is) I am excited for you to be properly published and established in the realm of fiction writers. From what I can tell I would gladly gobble up your stories! ;)
ReplyDelete~Ben ).
I am so so so so excited about knowing what's going to happen next!! You truly amaze me as a writer in your ability to suck me into the story from the first couple of sentences. Not many have that in them and that's what I'm sure will make you an awesome published author. Keep it up Brittney!! :)
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